People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, A lot of
people
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have been establishing
an
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a
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perfect
society
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but
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, but
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it
always
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has always
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does
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failed
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not
success
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succeed
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. I
belive
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believe
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that
diffrenence
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difference
between
people
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is very important, so we
shoud
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should
not
to
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apply
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be ideal at
every thing
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everything
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. But how can we improve our
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atmosphere
?
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we can do that by
enhance
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enhancing
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our
relativship
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relationship
and
assest
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assessing
each
others
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other
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. The
effictive
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effective
society
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depands
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depends
on
the
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apply
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good communication between
people
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especially
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, especially
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with family. If we deal well, we can improve our
life
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and we can do anything together.
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, when
somone
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someone
have
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has
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an
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a
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goal for the world, he can
communicat easly
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communicate easily
and
comfirtably
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comfortably
with
people
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to
acheve
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achieve
it.
Secound
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Second
, we have to know and
accsep
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accept
the
differnce
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difference
between us.
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Also
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try to use it
for
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to
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devolope
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develop
the
socity
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society
. When we understand how
that
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apply
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signifcant
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significant
, we will be able to make our
socity
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society
more
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apply
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better and
beutiful
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beautiful
. Sometimes I have
good
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a good
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mind and
another
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others
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have
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a greeter
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greeter
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greater
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one, so
throgh
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through
that we can
benefits
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benefit
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from ourselves.
In addition
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, some
people
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look for the ethic.
For example
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,
If
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if
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someone
apply
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applies
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to
company
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a company
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and he is not
the
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same
ethic
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ethnicity
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,
this
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is
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does
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not mean he does not
the
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have the
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ability to be
empoloyment
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employed
in
this
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organization
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organisation
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.
To sum up
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, creating an ideal
society
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is not easy or
take
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takes
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a few days. We should
to
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change from us than the
socity
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society
because we have to be more
opinly
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open
for
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to
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other
people
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and deal with them kindly as we want. These things can help us to
devolopment
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develop
an
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a
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great
society
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.

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Give clear examples and show how they help your point. Keep ideas tied to your main goal.
idea
You try to discuss how to build a fair society and use steps.
conclusion
You use a closing line 'To sum up' to finish.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ideal society
  • equality
  • social justice
  • sustainable practices
  • community engagement
  • economic stability
  • cultural diversity
  • accessible healthcare
  • fair justice system
  • educational opportunities
  • environmental sustainability
  • active participation
  • inclusive society
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