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Band 4.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contain some information about your home town which is incorrect. write a letter to the editor correct the information explain why it is important to give correct information suggests what should be done about the situation

Dear Sir, I hope that you find
this
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 letter in good health and spirits. I'm
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this
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writing this
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 letter to you to explain
about
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apply
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the inaccurate
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detail
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details
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about my
home
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town
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publish
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published
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 in an international travel magazine.
Moving
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Furthermore
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furthermore
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, in an article it says that my village does n't have any school facility and parking lot, which is totally not correct, as there is
school
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a school
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 and
parking
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a parking
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 zone located in
heart
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the heart
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 of my
home
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town
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.
Moreover
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, it is compulsory to provide accurate
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detail
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details
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 to
people
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 for making
decesion
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decisions
 for moving in our
society
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.
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, if individuals
not
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do not
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 find school in
society
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, they will not
ready
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be ready
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 to move
in
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to
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 our
home
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town
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, as you know the
valve
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value
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 of education in
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 modern era. In
such
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situation
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a situation
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, my village population will not
raise
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grow
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, which can later result in
finicial isuses
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financial issues
 and
unstable
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an unstable
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 income funding balance of
society
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.Despite
of
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it,
can
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it can
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 cause
loss
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a loss
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 in raising up level .
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, if
less
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fewer
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people
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 in
society
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will
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are
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 not able to achieve all targets
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such
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, such
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 as collecting
fund
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funds
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 for building hospitals and houses for needy
people
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, as everything is possible with
majority
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the majority
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 of
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people
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people's
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team work
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teamwork
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.
Apart from
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this
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, my personal advice is to publish a new article with correct
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detail
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details
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 and
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detail
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detailed
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 information, which
help
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helps
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people
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 to
fullfill
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fulfil
 their requirements and dreams for moving
in
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to
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safe
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a safe
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 and valuable
home
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town
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. " I kindly request you to understand my point of
veiw
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view
 and edit an article as soon as possible" Yours sincerely, Arshpreet

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planning
Plan your letter before you write.
language
Use short and clear sentences; fix spelling and grammar.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like and, then, also.
task
Be clear about what you want and give a time for the editor to act.
tone
Polite tone in the start and end.
content
You name the wrong fact in the article.
action
You ask for a correct article.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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