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Some university students prefer to live alone, while others choose to share accommodation with roommates. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

University life is a huge step
of
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in
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gowing
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growing
 up for teenagers. Because of it first time that younger
people
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 are totally
live
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living
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 by
themselft
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themselves
, lots of
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parent
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parents
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 are
worry
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worried
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 about
thier
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their
 child. to live alone gives
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student
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students
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privatecy
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privacy
, which is the main
reason
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 that
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student
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students
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 who
dose
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do
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 not love to
socailize
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socialise
 love to rent an apartment and live
individualy
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individually
.
However
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, I
storngly
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strongly
belive
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believe
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 that to have a roommate is better for
leaners
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learners
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.
First
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reason
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 is that the rental might be high. Many
of
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apply
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student
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students
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 are living far away from
university
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the university
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or
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, or
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 some of them are living in
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a diffrent
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diffrent
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different
 province, so
to rent
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renting
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 a dorm is essential for
student
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 to support their university life.
In
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On
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 the other hand, not every
parent
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 can afford those
price
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prices
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. In
this
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 case, to live with
friend
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a friend
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 is better because they can share the
mothly
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monthly
 rental and
dose
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do
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 not have to pay the full price
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. This
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this
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 could help
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parent
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parents
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 a lot
on
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with
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finace
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finances
. Another
reason
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 to support the advantage of having
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a roomate
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roomate
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roommate
 is that it more
safe
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safer
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in
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apply
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nowadays. Every
parent
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are
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apply
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cares about their
child
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child's
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suceaurities
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safety
, to stay far from home always
make
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makes
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parent
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parents
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worries
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worry
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 about the environment because they
dont
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don't
 know the place and
people
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 well
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, espeacailly
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espeacailly
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especially
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parent
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parents
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 who sent
theire
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their
 child to study
abord
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abroad
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.
For example
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,
exchange
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an exchange
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student
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, to have a partner
make
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makes
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 their parents less
worry
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worried
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 about them because
to stay
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staying
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 in
pair
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a pair
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 is
helpfull
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helpful
 when they are going out and
noticed
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notice
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 that they are in danger
they
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, they
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 can help each other The most significant
reason
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 to have a roommate is that it
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is helpfull
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helpfull
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helpful
 when they need to fix a
problems
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problem
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. Physically
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, human
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human
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humans
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felt
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feel
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 more comfort to have somebody around when they are in
troubble
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trouble
.
People
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 always
felling
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feel
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 that they are not facing the problem alone or they have been
leave
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left
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behide
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behind
. Because they can
make
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have
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 a discussion to solve the problem.
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, when I was an exchange
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student
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student,
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 I was very
affaird
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afraid
 to speak up
even
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, even
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 to order food or
told
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tell my
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 math teacher that I
have
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had
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a
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apply
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problems with
an
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apply
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algebra , but I
notice
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noticed
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 that I
am
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was
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 not alone because I
live
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lived
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 with my
roomate
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roommate
 who
alway
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always
stay
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stayed
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 beside me. In conclusion,
to stay
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staying
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 with friends
have
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has
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 a
lots
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lot
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 of
benefit
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benefits
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.
Such
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 as helping
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parent
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parents
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 with the rental, safer when
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student
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students
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 live far, and
make
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makes
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people
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felt
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feel
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 less fear of
problem
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problems
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. I completely
regcoment
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recommend
 teenagers to have a
roomate
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roommate
 during their
universtity
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university
 life.

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grammar
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structure
Make a clear plan before you write: intro, two ideas with plus and minus, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, for example.
ideas
Give more real examples or details to back up your points.
lexis
Be careful with form and rules of sentence like 'live alone' or 'roommate' to stay correct.
taskresponse
You cover both sides of the topic and give your own view.
coherence
You use life talk from your own life to show a point.

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