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The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph compares the
change
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 in prices of three different types of metals
namely
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Copper
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, Nickel, and
Zince
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Zinc
in
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, in
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 12 months
thoughout
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throughout
 2014. The data are given in
percentage
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percentages
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. Afterwards, from February to June, the
change
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 in
price
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 of
Nickle
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Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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 significantly decreased to the lowest point at 13% and -1% respectively
,
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.
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 Meanwhile, there was
slow
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a slow
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 decline in
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change
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the change
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 of
price
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 of
Copper
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 to almost -1%.
During
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From
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 June to July, those three metals experienced dramatic growth
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, before
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before
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but
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 the average
change
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 in
price
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 of those three
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metals remain
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remain
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remained
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 stable until September. The
last
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qauter
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quarter
, Nickel's and
Zinc
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's rose considerably to 1% and 2% respectively.
Lastly
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,
Copper
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's slightly increased to almost 2%.
Overall
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, the first half of the year, the
change
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 in
price
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 of
Nickle
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Nickel
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 and
Copper
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 dramatically dropped,
while
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Zinc's
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Zinc
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 witnessed
considerable
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a considerable
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 rise in
Febuurary
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February
 before declining
untill
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until
 June. They had
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a similarly
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similarly
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similar
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 trend in the third
quaters
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quarter
which
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, which
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 was stable in
price
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.
At the end
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 of the year,
Zinc
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's token
over
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is over
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 Nickel's.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, price, zinc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Volatility
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correlation
  • Economic factors
  • Speculate
  • Significant
  • Overall trend
  • Comparative analysis
  • Increase/decrease
  • Monthly change
  • Price movement
  • Stability/Instability
  • Speculative reasons
  • Global economic indicators
  • Commodities market
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Year-over-year analysis
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