in many countries, people are now living longer than ever before . Some people say an ageing population creates problems for government. Others believe there are benefits is society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantage of having old aged people outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, some
people
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believe that
over population
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overpopulation
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of old
people
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could
make
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create
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several issues for
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government
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the government
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,
while
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other
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others
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people
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argue that
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these
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eldery
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elderly
citizen
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citizens
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could
also
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be
advantage
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an advantage
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for society. In
this
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I will examine both views and provide the reason why I think
this
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is a negative trend for our society. On the
one
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hand,
one
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of the problems is
the
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that the
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government
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may earn
lower
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a lower
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income
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because the number of
tax payers
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taxpayers
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would
be
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decrease significantly. When
people
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are retired from their
jobs
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, they do not earn
income
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from
salary
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a salary
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and
therefore
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, they have no requirement
for paying
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to pay
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income
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taxes.
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, budgets for
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the country's
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development would
be
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inevitably decrease
and
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, and
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those
people
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may experience
lower
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a lower
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quality of living.
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
cannot implement free
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vaccines
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for everyone because they have to manage
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the budget
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to hire medical
staffs
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staff
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to look after senior
people
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.
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, those junior
people
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have to share their time
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to
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take
are
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care
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of older generations because
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the eldery
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eldery
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elderly
usually have severe health problems.
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, they have to have someone to be with to prevent any accident or mistake.
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, old
people
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have
diamentia symtom
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dementia symptoms
, so it is possible they
migh
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might
get
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lost
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during their journey and
it
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which
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causes another issue
to
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in
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searching for
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the missing
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one
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.
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, retired
people
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tend to have
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plenty
of
times
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time
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and resources for
traveling
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travelling
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more than other
ages
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age
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groups. After
long
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a long
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period of working, most
of
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old
people
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already have
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have already
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collected money and
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also
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are also
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free from their
jobs
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.
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, they will be able to travel wherever they want and pay what they want. It means cash flow in
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the market
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is growing because of their expenses.
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, every elderly
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people
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person
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need
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needs
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care takers
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caretakers
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because they cannot help themselves from their health
limitation
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limitations
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such
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, such
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as
diamentia
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dementia
and
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being bedridden
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. creating
jobs
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.
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,
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government
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the government
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have to hire
nourse
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nurses
for
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to
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monitor
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eldery
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elderly
patient
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patients
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the whole 24 hours in 7 days and it is impossible to hire just
one
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person,
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thus
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the
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hiring rate would be increased.
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is resulting in more
income
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for some occupations. In conclusion, even though
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apply
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having a
lots
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of senior
people
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may either support
tourism
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the tourism
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sector or
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create
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jobs
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, receiving less
income
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taxes and rising
of
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apply
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burdens seem to be more serious problems. I think if new generations have more responsibilities without proper support from
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government
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the government
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, it would be difficult to develop our situation because,
in stead
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instead
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of
focus
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focusing
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on self-development, other
generation
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generations
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have to
secrify
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sacrifice
their limited time to take care of
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the eldery
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eldery
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elderly
.
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, not every senior
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people
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person
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have
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has
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enough money and proper health to travel around
country
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the country
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, so the
earning
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earnings
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from
tourism
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the tourism
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sector cannot cover other expenses.

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Add more clear proof for each idea. Use simple facts to back your point.
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content
It uses examples like taxes and travel to show a point.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging
  • elderly
  • old
  • young
  • people
  • population
  • government
  • policy
  • plan
  • pension
  • health
  • care
  • cost
  • money
  • tax
  • budget
  • work
  • job
  • skill
  • experience
  • help
  • mentor
  • volunteer
  • family
  • community
  • society
  • life
  • grow
  • retire
  • retirement
  • age
  • balance
  • rise
  • save
  • spend
  • raise
  • problem
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • benefit
  • harm
  • solution
  • policy
  • future
  • support
  • service
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