Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce povert in the world. Others say economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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plays an important role in incomes. Many
people
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think that economic
growth
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and development
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important to reduce poverty. And others think that it needs to be
to be
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stopped because it’s damaging the
environment
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. In
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I will discuss both points and give a final thought
First,
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economic
growth
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can
to
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lead to
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new projects and investment
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can lead to
people
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finding jobs, good salaries and having a comfortable financial state. By
occupying
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assigning
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the new jobs to a qualified
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. Reducing the number of
non workers
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non-workers
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. There will be less
povertity
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poverty
.
On the other hand
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, having new projects
lead
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leads
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to many new manufacturing,processing fields and
Transportion
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transportation
. As they all can lead to population and harm in the
environment
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. That’s what makes
people
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think that governments need to
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a step
into stopping
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economic
growth
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.
As they
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care about the
environment
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more than the economic status and
growth
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. In my opinion, I think it’s not fair to think about the
environment
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more than
humans
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well being
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and comfort. I agree
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economic
growth
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people
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need to have the
free well in living
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good
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life.
poverty
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Poverty
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kills
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humans
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human
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human,
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not trees.

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layout
Make four clear blocks: intro, two body parts, and conclusion. Put one idea in each block.
content
Explain each point in full and add one simple example to show it.
cohesion
Use words like first, also, then, but, and so to show how ideas are linked.
language
Keep the tone and words simple and fix any big word errors so the text is easy to read.
editing
Check spell of key ideas like poverty, environment and growth and correct them.
content
Clear view of topic and effort to discuss both sides.
structure
A final opinion is given.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty
  • growth
  • development
  • economy
  • jobs
  • income
  • goods
  • services
  • education
  • health
  • roads
  • schools
  • money
  • policy
  • rule
  • law
  • trade
  • aid
  • inequality
  • poor
  • rich
  • country
  • world
  • environment
  • air
  • water
  • land
  • forest
  • climate
  • energy
  • pollution
  • waste
  • hazard
  • injury
  • invest
  • grow
  • save
  • use
  • tech
  • technology
  • green
  • clean
  • harm
  • benefit
  • job
  • child
  • family
  • life
  • future
  • change
  • plan
  • goal
  • solution
  • cooperation
  • lead
  • region
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