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Writing Samples
Band 5

You believe that your local library needs some improvments. Write a letter to the library manager to suggest changes. In your letter: -explain why you think the library needs imrovments , -suggest what changes should be made , -invite the manager to discuss your suggestions in more detail .

Dear Library
manager
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Manager
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, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my concern about some aspects of our local
libraray
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library
 that could
benefits
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 from
their
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its
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 improvements. Actually, some additions of the books are outdated
and
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, and
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all
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not all
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 fans are
not
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apply
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working properly
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as
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, as
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 well as limited sitting space is available.
Moreover
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, wifi's and computer facilities are not provided to students. Every lock has
key
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a key
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, so every problem
have
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has
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solution
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a solution
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. Actually, you should provide
a
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the
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 latest version of all books,
as well as
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 provide
air
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an air
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 conditioner and good quality
of
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apply
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chair
facilties
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facilities
, so everyone can read and sit comfortably.
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,nowadays internet access and
computer
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computers
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 are
basic
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a basic
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 need
of
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for
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 all students, so they can get ideas and prepare assignments or presentations without any distractions. Please let me know when you are available,
then
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 we can discuss
about
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apply
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improvements
of
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to
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local
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the local
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 library. I am eagerly waiting for your response! Yours sincerely, Abc

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language
Fix spelling and grammar to make the writing clear.
structure
Split the letter into clear parts: intro, why it is needed, what to change, and closing.
content
Be precise about the changes you want and give simple examples.
tone
Use a formal tone and avoid casual words.
conclusion
End with a clear offer to meet or talk with a time.
content
The writer states the aim and asks for talk.
content
It lists needs like books, seating, wifi, and computers.
tone
Polite closing and request to meet.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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