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Band 4.5

As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who cannot afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that
houses
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 should be given by the
government
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government,
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 as some
people
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 do not have enough
money
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 to buy one. They think it is a responsibility of the
country
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 to provide everybody with a home. I mostly agree
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that
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is
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it is
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 not their
duty
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duty
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;
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,
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as they focus on other aspects of the nation.  Many
people
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 think that the administration supports the public by giving free
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houses
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housing
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.
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is
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helps to
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; them to tackle the problem of homelessness. The number of
people
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 living on the streets will decrease.
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, it will increase the reputation of the
country
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 in homelessness rates.
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 shows that
standard
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the standard
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 of living in a specific
country
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 is better than
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in others
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.
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, many individuals can live in their
houses
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instead
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 of living on the streets. 
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, I think it is not a liability of
thegovernment
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the government
 as they have a limited budget. If the administration starts to purchase homes for everybody, it will be difficult since building blocks of flats are very expensive. As well
other
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as other
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 spheres should be developed from the
government
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government
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 budget.
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, all the layers of the population, including poor
people
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 provided with free education and medical services. In these spheres
country
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 allocates a lot of
money
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 for their development.
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,
money
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 from funds could be better spent on developing technology or infrastructure.  In conclusion,  even though it will be a great help for
people
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 who cannot buy it. The government is unable to provide
houses
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 since most of the
money
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 will go to
this
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. I personally support that it is not a duty of the
country
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. 

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language
Fix small grammar and spelling errors so the text is easy to read.
task
Make a clear main view in the first part and restate it in the end.
examples
Give one or two clear examples with numbers or facts to show the issue.
coherence
Link ideas in a steady way. Use simple words like first, then, also.
structure
Split the text in 4 short paragraphs so each idea has its own part.
idea
The essay shows a view and tries to talk about both sides.
structure
It uses some linking words like However and In addition.
structure
There is a short ending that repeats the view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social safety net
  • Economic stability
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Financial security
  • Economic downturn
  • Poverty
  • Stimulate the economy
  • Job seeking
  • Dependency culture
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Government expenditure
  • Labor market
  • Fraud
  • Welfare abuse
  • Quality of life
  • Budget constraints
  • Economic strain
  • Public funds
  • Employment incentives
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