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The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how to recycle organic waste to produce garden fertilizer (compost). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 series of five diagrams shows how three kinds of organic
wastes
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 (newspapers, grass, and waste food are turned into a chemical mixture or
fertilizer
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fertiliser
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 to be used for garden plants. A plastic container- two cubic meters in volume-stores these
wastes
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. On its four walls are three layers of vents for air coming in and going out. Waste food lies at the bottom of the container and piles up to 15cm in height. On
its
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top is grass
which
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, which
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 is
also
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 15cm in thickness.
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Then
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Then,
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 shredded newspapers are spread over. After that, nitrogen is poured in, and water is needed only when it is hot. With the cover tightly closed on the container, the decomposition process of these organic
wastes
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 starts under the effect of heat and
vapor
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 begins emitting out. The biogas arises continuously from the pile of
the
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apply
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wastes
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waste
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 and
releases
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is released
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out
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apply
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. After six months of fermentation, all the
wastes
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 are
finally
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 converted into the
fertilizer
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fertiliser
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 that can be used in gardens.
This
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 illustrates a chain of chemical reactions that can transform
wastes
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 into compost.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wastes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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