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Scenario: You're concerned about an issue in your neighborhood. Write a formal letter to the head of your local council. In your letter, you should: Describe the situation (what the problem is and how you discovered it) Explain why it's a concern for you and other residents Suggest what actions you believe the council should take

Dear Mr. Moeyaert, I am writing to lodge a complaint about the garbage
pick up
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 company. It has been two weeks since they came to our street to collect the litter.
Moreover
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, the street cleaning lady is
also
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 not coming regularly to clean the neighbourhood. As you already know, the city council assign the streets to the agency
who
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that
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come
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comes
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 to collect the household waste once
in
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apply
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a week. But due
an
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to an
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 argument with the council and garbage pick up company, the local people are suffering. They are no longer coming to
the
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apply
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our area for trash collection. The litter is all over the
on
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the
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apply
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footpath
as well as
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road
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the road
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, which has given rise to mosquitoes and fruit flies.
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, the whole street smells really bad, and the population of mosquitoes and flies is
increaing
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increasing
 day by day.
This
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 will
further
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 spread diseases like malaria and dengue in the locality. Would you kindly consider the seriousness of
this
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 situation and try to resolve the issue with the garbage pick up company as soon as
possinle
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possible
. Please try to communicate with the cleaning lady as well, and give her a definite schedule, so that she knows where to work on which day. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Simranpreet Kaur

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task response
Make the letter easier to read. Use short lines. Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with the problem, then say why it matters, then say what you want done. Give dates if you can.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, therefo re. Check the grammar. Break long sentences into two parts. Use the same tense.
tone
The letter keeps a polite and formal tone.
content
It clearly states what the writer wants from the council.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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