A large number of people are killed in road accidents every year. Why do so many accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help to reduce the number of road accidents. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Every year, a significant number of people die
as a result
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accidents
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while
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these
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happen
due to
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variety
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of reasons,
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and environmental factors. These incidents are often caused by irresponsible behaviour on the
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,
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sticter
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stricter
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, improved education and better
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facilities can reduce thousands of
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cases
. One of the biggest challenges
are
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, plenty of
drivers
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do not pay attention to signboards
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and
exceed speed limits, especially on highways. Ignoring traffic rules, dangerous overtaking.
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drivers
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using mobile phones
while
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speeding lose focus, which doubles the risk.
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, young
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in Sri Lanka
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on
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urban areas. To solve
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this
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issues,
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wearing
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seat belts and helmets,
following
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signals, and
avoiding
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avoid using
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mobile
phone
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phones
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use
whereas
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driving. Government can take
an
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apply
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actions Heavy fines, license suspension, or even arrest
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for
reckless
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.
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, speed
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on highways catch offenders automatically . In conclusion,
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accidents
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are mainly caused by reckless driving,
over-speeding
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speeding
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, and poor
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conditions. By enforcing traffic rules and improving
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safety awareness, the
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number
of
accidents
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can be significantly reduced.

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Some good ideas on causes and ways to fix, and a plan for action.
structure
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