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Reading is more important for devoloping imagination and language skills than television, Do you agree or disagree?

With modernisation the
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 has replaced
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traditional books
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 novels and biographies. Some individuals believe that
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reading is
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a
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 better key for enhancing imagination and language
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 than
television
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. I strongly disagree with the statement, because the
television
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 provides intellectual stimulation
neccesary
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necessary
 for creative imagination and
laguage
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language
 ability.
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, reading is as old school and not
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 interesting as
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modern
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. Black letters on
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white paper are not
neccesarily
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necessarily
 appealing to everyone. To some people, those books resemble
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a trauma as they symbolise study pressure.
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,
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it decreases
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 an individual's concentration.
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, I was an average student at my school
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 big books always reminded me of the study pressure.
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, I
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started
 avoiding reading in order to escape that pressure,
it
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which
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 reduced my grades drastically.
On the other hand
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,
television
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 is more interactive, the visual representation
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leaves
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 imprints on
brain
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the brain
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 automatically, without
concious
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conscious
 memorisation.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, it improves language ability because the audience could actually hear the actors talking. The video
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television
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engage
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engages
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 the population in the story,and
add
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adds
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 curiosity about the storyline.
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,
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 to
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a survey
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the university
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university
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University
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 of
Panipat
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Panipat,
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 children with exposure to
television
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 had better vocabulary and storytelling
skills
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. In conclusion, reading used to be an important tool, used for
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the development
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 of imagination and language
skills
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 in older days, but
television
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 is the gift of modern technology, which helps learn those
skills
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 more easily, without building any learning stress.

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task
Plan before you write. Put one main idea in each paragraph and keep it clear. Start with a short line that states your view.
task
Use simple facts. If you use a fact, make it easy to check or say it is from a study and not a real name.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use simple words like first, then, also, but, however, and in conclusion.
grammar
Be careful with grammar. Check verb form and subject and spell many words right.
coherence
Keep ideas in a simple flow. One idea in each paragraph helps the reader.
content
The essay shows a clear view against the statement.
structure
There are four clear parts: intro, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence
Some good links are used to move from one idea to another.
content
There is an example from own life to show a point.
content
The topic is on a real issue and written with effort.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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