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The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates change predictions of European young citizens in health,
air
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quality
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, water
quality
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, food
quality
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 and social communication in the upcoming 20 years. From a perspective
overall
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, it is forecasted that communication skills among people will reach a significant level,
whereas
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air
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quality
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 will get worse over time.
However
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, it is anticipated that food
quality
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 will improve in the first ten years,
then
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 it will slightly decrease in the second ten years. Regarding areas of enhancements, communications will present the greatest increase among all the aspects of change, reaching to peak at 64%,
while
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air
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quality
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 will receive the lowest percentage of progress, at almost 22%.
Moreover
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, a regular development in health and water
quality
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 will be witnessed,
then
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 it will be followed by a reduction movement
at the end
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.
In addition
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, food
quality
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 changes will be much greater than water
quality
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, around 50%.
According to
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 the negative changes, it is predicted that 38% of communication skills will be slightly affected by the end of the year.
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,
Air
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quality
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 is estimated to have the most enormous bad effect over time, nearly 78%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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