the maps below show part of a village in 1910, and same part of that village in 2010.

the maps below show part of a village in 1910, and same part of that village in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the maps below show part of a village in 1910, and same part of that village in 2010.
The maps illustrate Sharton
village
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and its appearance after several developments during the century .
Overall
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, the
village
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was changed to a modern place in 2010.
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Many old and simple buildings are demolished to make way for new skyscrapers. As the graph shows, only the post office was located in the north-eastern part of the Shalton
village
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in 1910. The centre of the
village
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had a green zone,
one
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big house in the past. During the time all the trees were chopped, the building was demolished
and
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houses were built in its place. At the top of the High Street, a Grocer, house and a
Baker
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Baker's
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were located in the early 20th century. Grocer and Baker were changed to Cafe and apartments
,
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however
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, houses were unchanged after 100 years. And
then
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, several apartments were built in the same place, but the post office was unchanged in 2010. At the bottom of the High Street , houses were built in 1910. In the part of Shalton, many skyscrapers were built in 2010. There were three facilities ( school, butcher and residential areas) at the top of the school road. In the early 21st century , schools remained unchanged,
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butchers disappeared to make way for new supermarkets and parking zones. The apartments were demolished and replaced by the bank.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 3 times.
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