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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present
The map provides key information
abou
Correct your spelling
about
 how the village of Ryemouth has changed from 1995 to now.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
village
Correct article usage
the village
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 has changed a
line
Use the right word
little
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 bit
from years
Correct word order
years from
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 1955 to now.
In addition
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,
in
Change preposition
apply
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 1955 next
the
Change preposition
to the
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 sea we have a fish market
also
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 in the sea
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 a boat port,
whereas
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 in present
has
Correct pronoun usage
it has
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 changed to apartments.
Firstly
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,
according to
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 what is shown,in the
past
Punctuation problem
past,
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 next to the
Use synonyms
hotel
Punctuation problem
hotel,
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 we
don't
Wrong verb form
didn't
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 have any parking
to
Change preposition
for
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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tourist
Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
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.Behind the
Use synonyms
hotel
Punctuation problem
hotel,
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 we have a forest park
in
Change preposition
on
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a
Correct article usage
the
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 left side of the
hotel
Use synonyms
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the garden is where we have a shop behind a fish market.
Finally
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,
In
Fix capitalization
in
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term
Fix the agreement mistake
terms
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 of the present,Changes happened
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such
Punctuation problem
, such
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 as
:
Punctuation problem
apply
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 a parking
next
Check wording
space next
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 to the
hotel
Use synonyms
.
behind
Fix capitalization
Behind
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 the
hotel
Use synonyms
 change from park to
club
Correct article usage
a club
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 of tennis and golf.
Linking Words
Fix capitalization
Moreover
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moreover
Add a comma
moreover,
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 he
add
Wrong verb form
added
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 more housing and buildings.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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