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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features amd make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features amd make comparison where relevant.
The process provides key information about
a
Correct article usage
the
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 stages the factories used to make noodles. 
Overall
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,it is clear from that the technique is a
multi-stages
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multi-stage
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,Linear process
,
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apply
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that involves eight steps.
In addition
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,the process begins with collecting
a
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apply
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flour and juicer water with oils,
whereas
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 it ends with
packaging
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the packaging
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 being ready to sell. 
Firstly
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,
according to
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 what is shown, the system
start
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starts
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 with a traffic but a flour inside a machine.After that mixed the flour with oils and water and
make
Wrong verb form
made
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 a sheet. In the next step sheets it is cooked.
Finally
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,
In
Fix capitalization
in
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 terms of
these
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this
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 method
after
Punctuation problem
, after
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 cooking
a
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the
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 noodles,It is placed in cups with vegetables and
flavors
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flavours
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.They are packaged in plastic and sold in shopping stores.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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