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Writing Samples
Band 5

A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

Dear Angela, I hope you are doing well
?
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.
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I am writing to you
this
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 letter to share my
advise
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advice
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 on how to fit in your new
school
Use synonyms
 since you are having difficulties
to fit
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fitting
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 in.
Firstly
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,making friends is one of the best ways to help you fit
in
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into
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 a new
school
Use synonyms
.
This
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 could be done by being sociable in class.
Eventhough
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Even though
 I know you are very quiet by nature,you need to try your best to
socialize
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socialise
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 in class.Especially during group
works
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work
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.
Furthermore
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,you can make friends by being good academically.
This
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 will help attract people to you
since
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, since
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 every student likes to be friends with brilliant students It will be good to join clubs
such
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 as science clubs,dancing and
poet
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poetry
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 clubs.
This
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 will expose you to different people with common interests.
Additionally
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,you can
also
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 participate in
school
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 activities
such
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 as football matches and
cardet
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card games
.
This
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 will help you be seen by many whenever there is a program is held in the
school
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 premises.
As a result
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,you will be liked by everyone.
In as much
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Inasmuch
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 as you are having challenges in your first few weeks, you need to know that it is normal.Do not be too hard on yourself.Just give yourself some time.Everything will be okay after
few
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a few
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 months. My warmest greetings to your siblings,especially Teresa. Your friend Esther.

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grammar
Check spelling and word form (advise vs advice, Even though, card games). Simple mistakes make the writing hard to read.
structure
Use more linking words to move ideas smoothly (Firstly, then, also, finally).
organization
Try to keep one clear idea in each paragraph; break long ideas into short lines.
tone
Keep a simple and kind tone; offer more questions to help your friend talk.
tone
The letter has a warm, friendly tone and shows care for the friend.
content
It gives good ideas to make friends and to join clubs.
style
The closing is supportive and hopeful.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduce yourself
  • genuine interest
  • rapport
  • like-minded individuals
  • school community
  • volunteer
  • open-minded
  • comfort zone
  • casual setting
  • hobbies and activities
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