Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people arge that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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on
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anually
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annually
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while
everyone
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that
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money
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should be spent on poverty and education to improve lifestyle. In my opinion,
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dollars
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authorities are not
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a waste
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of
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,
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the spaceshuttle
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spaceshuttle
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space shuttle
may provide
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technology
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and can
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creating
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better
life
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standards.
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with, the government authorities are giving
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higher
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to
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space
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the space
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agency.
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,
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studies
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on
outer
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the outer
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orbit of
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the earth
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earth
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atmoshphere peovided
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atmosphere provided
advanced communication
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for humans
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such
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as GPS, wireless
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networks
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.
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this
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,
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rocket
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rockets
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may create human
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better.
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,
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of
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the
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apply
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space
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and launching more satellites is helpful in future for every field
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such
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as medical, science, and electronics, so
this
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money
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can lead mankind to
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a more
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advance
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future.
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apply
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done by Western Sydney University which says
high
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the high
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expense of
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agencies
such
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as NASA and ISRO
developed
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human lives with so many gadgets and
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technology
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technologies
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.
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,
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should be
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on poor people and their improvements.
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,
this
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budget
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may
create
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improve
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their
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better without any doubt, but
this
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can lead to
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the development
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of any particular area or community.
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,
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development can
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be benificial
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benificial
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beneficial
to
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the entire
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world.
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, the ministry
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saprate
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separate
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for human and poverty, so
this
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money
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spent may not affect the humans in
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a nagative
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nagative
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negative
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, there was an article in the Times of India which
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the government has the responsibility of
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developing
human
life
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,
technology
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and many other
factor
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factors
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as well, so they divide the
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according
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need
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. In conclusion,
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spent
behind
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space
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research
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is not
waste
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a waste
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of
money
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, because it can
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also be
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also
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helpful to
imrpove
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improve
human
life
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standards,
while
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the authorities have another
budget
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for the same purpose of improving lifestyle.

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task
Be clear in your view at the start. Say if you agree or not in the first line.
coherence
Keep one main idea per paragraph and grow it with easy facts.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, however.
language
Use only simple words. Check spelling of common words.
task
Give one clear example that fits your reason.
planning
Plan before you write. Write short, clear sentences.
idea
You show a view that space money can have use, and you give a reason that it may lead to better tech.
cohesion
You use some link words to show contrast, like on the other hand and so.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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