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The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.

The bar chart gives information about southland's main exports in 2000, 20.., and future projection for 2025. Summarize main features and make comparison where relavent.
The bar chart
bellow
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below
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 illustrates information about
southland's
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Southland's
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 main foreign trades in the
2000's
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2000s
 and 2010, and their soon to be plans for 2025. In the
year
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2000
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2000,
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 the meat products hit
a
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an
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all time
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all-time
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 high in comparison
in
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to
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 the
year
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 2010
which
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, which
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 decreased by
two thirds
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two-thirds
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.
Linking Words
on
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On
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 the largest exports
was
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were
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 international tourism with a marginal 8
billion
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 pounds. By 2010, international tourism by 1
billion
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pound
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pounds
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 and by the
year
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2025
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2025,
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 it
increased
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had increased
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 by another
billion
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, similar to dairy products but just the opposite.
Moreover
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, in the meat
section
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section,
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 the
year
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 2000 took the lead here
and
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, and
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 the market cap was decreasing by 1
billion
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each
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in each
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 section. In conclusion, the main exports fluctuate over the
year
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some
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, some
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thing
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things
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 rise and others drop
but
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, but
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 the pattern
remained
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remains
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 the same,
but
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apply
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the sum of exports in the
year
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 2025 is lower than
other
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in previous years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • exports
  • the main export
  • the largest export
  • the biggest share
  • the smallest share
  • figure
  • number
  • amount
  • part
  • share
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • upward trend
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • go down
  • downward trend
  • change
  • change over time
  • trend
  • pattern
  • stable
  • remains the same
  • big
  • small
  • large
  • great
  • minor
  • highest
  • lowest
  • top
  • bottom
  • lead
  • be the leader
  • be the leader
  • be the main export
  • compare
  • comparison
  • in comparison with
  • overall
  • in general
  • between
  • from
  • to
  • by
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