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The Process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The provided diagram illustrates the step-by-step process of
Pu-erh
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 raw and ripe
tea
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 production.
According to
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 the data, the production involved multiple sequential stages, beginning with drying the
tea
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 and culminating in two types of ready-to-brew
Pu-erh
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tea
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. As shown in the figure, the process began with frying the
Pu-erh
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tea
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 leaves using a pan. Once heated, the leaves are rolled and placed under the sun for drying until they turn brown, resulting in loose raw
tea
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 that serves as raw material for manufacturing the two types of
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tea
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. To produce aged raw
Pu-erh
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tea
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, the loose raw
tea
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 is compressed, forming raw
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, and
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 stored for a certain period for the
aging
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ageing
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 process. Meanwhile, ripe
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tea
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 is made by fermenting the loose raw
tea
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 until it ripens, and is pressed into powder form.

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coherence
Explain the steps in clear order: first, next, after that, finally.
accuracy
Be sure facts are right. If the text says the ripe tea is a powder, note that this is not usual and use the idea that the tea is pressed into cakes.
style
Use short sentences and small ideas. Break long lines into two parts.
coherence
Use linking words to show both parts and compare raw and ripe tea.
structure
Open with a short view of the whole and end with a short wrap.
structure
The essay starts with a clear note on what the diagram shows.
process
It uses link words like 'as shown' to join ideas.
structure
It keeps to the idea of two tea types and steps.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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