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Some people believe that the internet has made face-to-face communication less important and has led to increased social isolation. Others argue that the internet has improved our ability to stay connected with friends and family, making us less isolated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The issue of the
internet
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 affecting the social lives of millions is significant nowadays. It is apparent that the subject is complex and depends on many
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criteria
, so we can not indicate for sure a certain trend for it.
This
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 essay will first analyse how
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internet
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the internet
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 is affecting human communications,
then
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 it will investigate the different
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opinions
 around
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the subject
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.
obviously
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,
modern
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the modern
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 era of communications was
massivley
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massively
 altered when the
internet
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 was invented.
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instead
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 of going out to
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meet
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 friends and relatives,
people
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 would rather
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 at their homes messaging strangers. For
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, millions spend hours of their daily life on apps like X or Snapchat
instead
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 of exploring the
world
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.
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 led to many being isolated from their environment, but at the same
time
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time,
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 many benefited as they took the good and left the bad. You can obtain great privileges from these websites
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apply
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 if you manage your time correctly. We can see both sides of the cyber
world
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 in the second
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paragraph
,
people
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 can get
to
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too
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 deep into it, which leads to them being isolated or
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suffering
 from little social
experince
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experience
.
In
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 many knew how to benefit from it and
gaind
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gained
 a lot of knowledge and acquaintance.
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 is the reason that the thoughts about the digital
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 differ
,
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;
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people
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 do not see it from one perspective, because it is a huge
world
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.
For instance
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, let us look at the app (X
)
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),
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it is one of the most used apps in the
world
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 billions of accounts
are
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apply
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active
in
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on
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this
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 website. You can see the news, watch videos or read
therds
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threads
. It has a wide range of
activites
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activities
, which makes the view of the app different from person to person.
This
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 essay looked first at how the
internet
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 affected communications between
people
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,
then
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 it went through how the
opinninos
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opinions
 of
internet
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 users differ. It is
diffcult
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difficult
 to say if the
internet
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 has a positive or a negative effect on
people
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 since the
experince
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experience
 between users
differ
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differs
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.
Internet
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 usage will
probbaly
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probably
 continue to grow and the
opinnios
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opinions
 will most likely not change.

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planning
Plan your essay first: note down two views and your own clear line. Then write an intro that repeats the question in simple words, two body paragrphs for each view, a short para for your view, and a simple conclusion.
content strength
You show the topic and try to compare both sides.
content strength
You use some ideas about how the web can be good and bad.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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