In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough . What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear line that says what you think. Then add two good points for and against, and end with a short view.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Check small mistakes with grammar and spell words.
content
Give one or two good examples that fit the points. Avoid too many facts you cannot explain.
content
You try to talk about both sides of the question.
structure
There is a plan: an intro, some body parts, and a short ending.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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