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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
research
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 students for two genders in six different subjects
:
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physics
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,
astronomy
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,
geology
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,
biology
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,
medicine
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, and veterinary
medicine
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. In the United States University in 2009.
Overall
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, the highest
number
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 of
research
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 students was recorded by
men
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 in
physics
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,
astronomy
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,
geology
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,
biology
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, and
medicine
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.
In contrast
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, women took the largest
number
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 of studies in veterinary
medicine
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.
To begin
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 with, males achieved the largest
number
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 in
physics
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,
astronomy
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, and
geology
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 , accounting for over 200, 150, and 150 ,
relatively exceeded
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 the
number
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 by more than half.
Likewise
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,
men
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 still reach the peak in
biology
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, recorded by over 250.
Medicine
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 studies were
also
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 recorded by
men
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 by about 200.
On the other hand
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, the women who studied
research
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 in veterinary
medicine
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 exceeded the
men
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 by over 100,
while
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 in other subjects, they had the less amount than the
men
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.
Furthermore
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, the two second common subjects in female
research
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 were
biology
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 and
medicine
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 recorded with 200 and over 150
respectively
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, respectively
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, but never achieved more than 100 in
physics
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,
astronomy
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, and
geology
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, research, physics, astronomy, geology, biology, medicine, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • male
  • female
  • research
  • students
  • subjects
  • total
  • overall
  • significantly
  • higher
  • compared
  • indicating
  • gap
  • exception
  • balanced
  • representation
  • preference
  • attract
  • disciplines
  • data
  • suggests
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