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The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The maps illustrate the design of an office building and
future
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 plans for improvements and renovations.
Overall
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, the
future
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 plan shows that there will be an expansion of the working
offices
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 and demolition of some parts of the building.
However
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, some areas will remain the same with no remarkable change. The present office rooms at the bottom of the map are relatively small; the
future
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 plan is to expand the
offices
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,
therefore
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, the four
offices
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 will be converted into two bigger
offices
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 with an entrance hall between them.
Moreover
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, the kitchen and canteen at the top of the present map will be transformed into extra
offices
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. Perhaps, the storeroom to the left of the canteen will remain in its same position.
In addition
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, the WCs place, which is below the storeroom, will be transferred to the top right of the building, occupying a part of the
grass
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area
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. A
further
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future
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 improvement is diminishing areas of the building.
For instance
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, the
grass
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area
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 on the right side of the building will be replaced with a coffee machine and a meeting
area
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 with chairs.
Similarly
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, the
grass
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area
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 on the left side will
also
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 be converted to an outdoor seating
area
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, and chairs will be added.
Besides
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, the entrance hall that leads to the left
grass
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area
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 will remain with no change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words future, offices, grass, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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