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The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates two possible locations for a new planned supermarket in Garldson
town
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.
Overall
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, the S1
will be
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will be far away from the centre of the
town
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 and might serve less of the
population
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,
whereas
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 S2 will clearly be accessible to more citizens and will be surrounded by
industrail
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industrial
 areas. Regarding the S1, it will be located in the countryside, exactly in the
north western
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northwestern
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 region, between the railway and the main road. In fact, it will be far away from a lot of
population
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, and out of the housing and downtown area.
However
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, it will be near
to
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the Hindon
population
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,
that
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which
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consist
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consists
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 of 10,000.
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, it will be close to the housing area in the Northern region.
According to
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 S2, it will
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take place between two manufacturing areas, particularly in the downtown centre, where there will be no traffic roads.
In addition
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, a railway will cross through the
town
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 near the supermarket.
Furthermore
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, it will serve the Crandson
population
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, who
is
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 exactly 29,000,
as well as
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 the Brandson citizens, who are over 15,000.
Besides
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, another main road will pass at the North edge of the Garldson
town
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 centre, the road will extend to 12 km reaching the Hindson society.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • foot traffic
  • local traffic
  • visibility
  • suitability
  • residential areas
  • main highway
  • convenience shoppers
  • shopping habits
  • attraction
  • characteristics
  • potential locations
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