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Some people believe that teenagers should work part-time jobs while studying. Others think they should focus only on their studies. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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this
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 generation, people
easly
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easily
to
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apply
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get
a
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money or a
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money
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 or job, because so many new jobs in 2025.
its
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It
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make
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makes
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 teenagers who
update
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are updated
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 with
situation
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the situation
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 want to get
money
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 too
like
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, like
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an
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apply
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adults.
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or
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 people called
they
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them
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 as sandwich generation, with
not
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no
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stabil
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stability
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mind
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, but the fact is
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 have
incridebel
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incredible
idea
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ideas
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with
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about
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 their
live
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lives
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.
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Z
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also
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 like travelling or
usualy
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usually
 they
called
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call
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 it
as
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apply
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healing. Healing
is need
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needs
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money
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, so in
ttheir
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their
 free
time
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, or if they have
time
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beside
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besides
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study
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studying
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, they
work
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. They can take
part-
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a part-time
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time
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 job as waiters,
as
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apply
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baby sitting
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babysitting
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, or become a freelancer who take
the
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apply
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jobs
by
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on
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project
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a project
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.
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basis.
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Is
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It
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make
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makes
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 have
good
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a good
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 experience before they enter the real
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work
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world
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in
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as
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 adults. If they have
that
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those
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expreinets
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experiences
 to
work
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 with an adult,
its
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it
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make
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makes
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 them learn so many things. The
exampel
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example
 is
,
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apply
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 a student who
just
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has just
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study
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studied
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 at school, and
dont
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doesn't
 have experience
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work
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working
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in
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with
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an
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apply
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adults, is
diffrent
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different
.
but
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But
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 on the other
hands
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hand
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, we have to remember that teenagers
also
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 have
they
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their
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 priority, the priority is to
study
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.
if
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If
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 they
work
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part
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part-time
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time
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jobs
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jobs,
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is
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it
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make
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makes
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 them tired because
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they dont
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dont
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don't
 have
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time
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time,
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 so
rest
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they rest
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maxsimaly
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maximally
, or
is make
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apply
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them
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they
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dont
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don't
 want to
study
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just
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, just
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 want to get
money
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,
is
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which is
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 not good
too
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apply
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for them self too. In conclusion, if they can balance
it
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it,
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 what the priority student is, is really
oke
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okay
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 to try
get
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to get
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 a job for
teenager
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a teenager
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.
the
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The
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 teenagers will learn a lot with
that
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those
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expreinces
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experiences
, but parents must be
concerd
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concerned
to
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about
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 their parents to
balanced
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balance
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it
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their
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time
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.

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structure
Make a plan: write a short intro, then one paragraph for each view, then a short ending with your view.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Keep short sentences to avoid errors.
content
Give at least one clear example for each view.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, but, and finally.
grammar
Check spelling of common words and keep verb forms consistent.
content
You show both sides of the topic and tell your own view.
content
You give some real job ideas for teens, like waiting, babysitting, and freelance work.
content
You say that balance with study is needed.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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