In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 word

Health
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has been covered by personal expenses in many states
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however
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public
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the public
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feel
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that it should be a responsibility of
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government
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the government
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to take
care
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of it. Many developed countries cannot provide medical insurance, because of
its
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their
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poor
economical
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economic
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status, and
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, people have to pay
themselves
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apply
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for their
treatment
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own treatment
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.
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,
this
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policy relieves the
government
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from financial responsibility, but creates an additional
monetry
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monetary
burden on the population.
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, in a developing country like Pakistan, where
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the economy
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is not strong,
gonvernment
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government
hospitals are not well
equiped
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equipped
,
therefore
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patients
does
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do
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not prefer to visit there despite
of
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apply
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free of cost treatment. They
rather
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would rather
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go to private hospitals and pay
from
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out of
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their pockets to get standard of
care
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treatment.
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, I feel that medical insurance is a better way to improve
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the general
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health
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condition in any region. People pay taxes
and
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, and
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those should be utilised to cover their well-being. They have a right to it.
Government
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hospitals should entertain all medical emergencies free of cost, so that even
a
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poor can access good
health
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.
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, every American citizen fills medical insurance form, and
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he is
laible
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liable
to entitle all
health
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benefits at any time.
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is
beneficial greatly
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when someone is struggling for their
jobs
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job
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and is found to have some serious
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issues. He does not feel
overburden
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because his medical
care
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is on the state. In the conclusion, people can pay for their
health
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if they want to, but it is a big sigh when someone else is taking
care
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of it, and
specially
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if it is a reliable body.
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,
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government
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the government
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should make
health
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freely accessible to all, so that good
health
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is not limited to
rich
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the rich
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only.

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task response
Task response: Your view is clear but the answer is not fully developed. Start with a clear opinion in the first sentence, and add stronger reasons. Include more specific, relevant points and examples to support them.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some ideas are not well joined. Use linking words to show how ideas fit together (for example, and, also, but, so, because). Keep a simple plan: intro, 2-3 body paragraphs, conclusion.
strength
You state a clear view on government health care.
strength
You give a real life example (Pakistan and the U.S.) to make a point.

Your opinion

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