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Although both nature and nurture play a role in personality, a number of large-scale twin studies suggest that there is a strong genetic component. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that both environmental influences and genetic predisposition shape people’s character, as some twin studies
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 that they
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 a large amount of genetics.
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,
this
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 essay will explain the reasons behind these similarities.
Firstly
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, twins’ similarity is
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biological reasons,
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 they are created
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same
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the same
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 sperm and
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that
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 later
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they
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divide
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 two embryos. As
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, they
going
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 to have the
quiet
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same genetics that lead to a lot of resemblance in their outward features
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,
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 the colour of eyes, the colour of
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 and the same
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 form. Thereby, there are other factors like
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 the fetu locating and environmental conditioning in
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the uterus
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can
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 act effectively on the
twin’s
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 specifications. These types of twins can have individual differences in their behaviour because of the parenting style and peer pressure,
life’s
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life
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experiencing
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, friends and
culture
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 impact on their personality traits.
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, there are similar twins who are exactly the same
but
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 there is a difference in their personality traits which one of them could be naughty
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other
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 one well behaved and patient. To summarise, I personally believe that as they are together from the initial days of their creation, it makes sense that as they
born
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, grow up, experience
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life together, they have
such
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 a feature naturally and
nurturally
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naturally
.

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task response
Make your view clear from the start and keep to it to the end of the essay.
structure
Plan first. Use a simple outline with an intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
content
Give stronger, more specific examples to show how genes and environment work together.
grammar
Check grammar and spell each word, and use short, plain words.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit, like 'first', 'also', 'then', 'but', 'however'.
content
The topic is clear and the idea of nature vs nurture is kept in mind.
content
The essay tries to use examples to support ideas.
content
There is an attempt to discuss both sides of the issue.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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