There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter •Describe the complaints that have been made •Say why the reception area is important •Suggest how the reception area could be improved

Dear Mrs Spiwe, I am writing to you
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letter in regards to the complaints I have received concerning the
reception
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area and some suggestions to improve
on
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it.
Firstly
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,Tees
healthcare
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has always had a good name
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terms of providing quality care to clients.
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,there
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have
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been some concerns raised by visitors in the past few months.Some families who visit often have begun complaining about how small the
reception
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space
it
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.
Due to
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this
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,there is too much noise followed
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bad
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a bad
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smell in
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area.
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,others complained about the
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being too noisy.And
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is because the television is always on loud volume. The
reception
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is very important since it is the first point of contact in the company.Anyone who comes to our care home always
have
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has
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to first make enquiries at
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room
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this
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clearly shows how important
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area is to the company.
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Even
,the other offices are
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important ,the
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surpasses all other rooms. The
reception
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can
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however
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however,
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be improved by ensuring that the television is turned off when not in use.
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,
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the volume
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of the television should be turned down to avoid nuisance.
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,the room can be renovated and expanded to create more space for folks who come in to visit. I hope my suggestions will be taken into consideration. Yours sincerely Esther

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structure
Add more clear steps to fix the issue with price and time show. e.g., make space bigger, move the TV, and check smell daily for a week.
organization
Use one idea per part. Start with the problem, then why it matters, and then the fix in clear steps.
style
Keep a formal and clean tone. Check for big errors in grammar and spelling.
language
Link ideas with small connect words like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore' but not too many run on sentence.
content
Clear aim to fix the reception area.
tone
Polite tone with good closing.
content
Covers all parts: problems, why it matters, and changes.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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