IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You recently visited a local community centre and noticed that some facilities could be improved. Write a letter to the manager of the community centre. In your letter: Describe what facilities you used Explain what problems you faced Suggest how the facilities could be improved

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to share a few
feedbacks
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pieces of feedback
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 regarding the community centre I visited
last
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 week on July 15th for the fire safety training that might
be
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apply
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help you
to
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apply
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enhance
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 participants' experience and accessibility. I attended the
traning
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training
 session
organized
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organised
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 in your seminar hall
which
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, which
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 was
speacious
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spacious
, fully
upgarded
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upgraded
 with required technological gadgets and
the
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soundproof.
Overall
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 experience was good and everyone enjoyed your services.
However
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, I encountered some issues that might be solved.
Firstly
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, the seating arrangement was uncomfortable for
long-session
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long sessions
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.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors, and use simple word form like 'a few pieces of feedback' and 'the training'.
structure
Add a proper ending with a closing phrase and your name.
content
Give more detail about the place you used and the problem, and give clear ideas for how to fix them.
content
Suggest at least two clear changes to improve the place, with steps.
clarity
Make the date clear and avoid mixing 'last week' with a date.
tone
Polite tone and clear purpose in the opening.
structure
Clear layout with separate paragraphs for each idea.
content
You mention what was used and a problem.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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