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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and give any relavent examples from your own knowledge or experienc.

The Internet has greatly made our lives more convenient, in terms of our learning, entertainment, and daily life. We can use iPads for electronic teaching and take notes on them. In terms of entertainment, you can shoot short videos and play games
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. In daily life, online shopping can be done on Taobao and JD.com.

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coherence
Plan your essay at the start. Write a short line to say your view, then give two clear points.
structure
Add a simple opening and a small end that restates your idea.
coherence
Give more detail to each point so the reader can see how it helps life.
task
Answer all parts of the question and show your view in the end.
coherence
Make one idea go with each point and keep to the point.
task
Use clear and real examples that fit the point you make.
content
The write keeps to the topic and uses clear points.
content
Examples do fit the idea of learning, fun, and daily life.
language
Language is simple and easy to read.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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