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The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart illustrates the total
number
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 of visitors in three London museums, measured in millions, from 2007 to 2012.
According to
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 the data, the visitors to the National Gallery rose significantly,
while
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 a fluctuating trend was observed in the
number
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 of guests of the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 and the British
Museum
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 throughout the period shown. As shown in the figure,
initially
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 in 2007, more than 5
million
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 tourists visited the National Gallery in London. Over the years,
this
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number
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 reported a notable growth, nearly tripling to around 15
million
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 by the end of the period shown.
Conversely
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, fewer than 15
million
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 individuals went to the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 in the early years and remained constant in the next year. Despite reporting a decline for the next two years, it reported a gradual growth, reaching 10
million
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 by 2012. Interestingly, the total
number
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 of British
Museum
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 visitors experienced a similar pattern, starting at approximately 12
million
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 and dropping to just above 5
million
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 by 2009.
Subsequently
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, those who visited
this
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museum
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 displayed an upward trajectory with a difference of 2
million
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 from its initial
number
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 over the observed timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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