Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do advantages of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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my own view.
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with, some couples are focusing on career
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rather than having a child.
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, in Japan and the USA in both countries people save money to purchase a house or possessions before they have had
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like to take responsibility for their
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they want to spend on time
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events.
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as they may face some difficulties
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enthusiasm.
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my perspective, if young couples think about having
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it leads to some pros
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they understand real
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, I would argue that people should prioritise having
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later
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task
The essay needs a clear answer to the question. Start with a short view in the intro and then give two to three well explained reasons, followed by a clear verdict in the end.
coherence
Make the plan clear: give a reason, explain it, and show how it helps your view. Keep each paragraph about one idea.
grammar
Use simple and correct words. Fix common errors such as 'In this day age' (Nowadays) and 'have had children' (have children). Check grammar and word choice.
content
Add more precise examples. Instead of general ideas, give a small, clear fact or effect of delaying parenthood on life, money, or health.
content
The writer tries to link the topic to real places (Japan, USA).
structure
There is a clear ending that states the writer's own view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritization
  • financial stability
  • educational prospects
  • personal development
  • health advancements
  • fertility options
  • economic uncertainties
  • parenthood
  • societal norms
  • life experience
  • generational gap
  • upbringing
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