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The money spent by the governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the
last
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 few years, the authority of every nation around the world
spending
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has been spending
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 huge funds on astronomical missions.
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, some people believe that
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the authority'
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authority'
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authority's
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 money should be prioritised for essential sectors,
such
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 as
education
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 and medical.
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, I strongly agree with
this
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 statement that
would
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will
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 be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. In spite of investing
on
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in
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scoloar
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scholarly
 studies,
council
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the council
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 should
privilage
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privilege
 the educational
sectors
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sector
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, as
this
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 sector
have
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has
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 a far more
immidate
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immediate
 and meaningful impact on the
well being
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well-being
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 of
the
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apply
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society.
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, as
education
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 is the key
of
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to
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 success and
fundamental
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a fundamental
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 right of every individual, it has been seen many times, by getting free
education
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 from
government funded
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government-funded
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 schools and colleges, numerous students achieve popularity and prestige for their nation at
international
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an international
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 level.
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, Dr. A.P.J. Abdul Kalam-Former President of India. He
stuided
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studied
 in a government school, invented the missile, and
become
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became
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the
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a
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world famous
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world-famous
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 scientist. Another most significant benefit is that it promotes
the
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a
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helthier
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healthier
 lifestyle,
reduce
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reduces
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 the mortality rates and risks of infection among the people, which not only
improve
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improves
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 the public health but
also
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reputate
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repute
 the
country
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country's
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 face . To make it clearer, if
state
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the state
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would provide
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provided
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 free of cost medical aid to
local
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the local
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 masses, so poor community those who cannot afford expensive medical
treatment
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treatment,
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 can be easily treated by
reignal
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regionally
 funded hospitals.
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, it
dropdown
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drops
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 the number of deaths and assists
local
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locals
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 to stay healthy.
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, during
the
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apply
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COVID 19
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COVID-19
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, all the
administration
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administrations
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 of
country
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countries
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 around the globe
spend
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spent
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huge
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a huge
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 amount of money to supply
the
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apply
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oxygen
cylinder
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cylinders
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 and
vaccine
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vaccines
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 to the hospitals where infected patients were treated. In conclusion, despite having some drawbacks of
utilizing
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utilising
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lower
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a lower
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 budget in the field of space research,
the
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a
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 big
porton
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portion
 of government
fund
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funds
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 should be granted to facilitate the locals with
education
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 and quality
of
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apply
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medical help, as it
encourage
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encourages
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local
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the local
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 public to remain
healthful
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healthy
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 and
make
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makes
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country
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the country
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 proud by getting
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education
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an education
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 and
achieve
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achieving
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 remarkable
succes
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success
 at
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an internation
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internation
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international
 level.

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task response
State your main view in the first line and keep it. Your essay shows a view, but say it plainly at the start.
coherence
Make each idea in one paragraph and use topic sentences. Use simple link words like first, next, then, finally.
grammar
Check spelling and word form. Fix common errors and wrong forms to make reading easy.
content
Give a clear example for each idea and show how it proves your point.
structure
End with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view and does not add new ideas.
content
The writer gives a view that space money should go to schools and hospitals.
structure
Two body parts show the idea of money for education and health.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • governments
  • money
  • public services
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • space programmes
  • vital
  • agree
  • disagree
  • future generations
  • education
  • skilled workforce
  • investing
  • healthcare
  • disease
  • society
  • luxury
  • basic needs
  • scientific knowledge
  • immediate needs
  • prioritizing
  • quality of life
  • well-being
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