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Nowadays human activities have had negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem while others argue that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the majority of plant and animal species are bad
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 of human activities.
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 some population think it is too late to solve
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 issue, others still believe that there are some effective measures that can bring improvements. In my opinion, there are some realistic solutions to improve human activities without causing any damage. There are always several solutions to any situation.
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 means it is possible to improve people's activities even if it will take a long time.
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, in most situations when a group of community are going to have a picnic in nature, they take a huge amount of food with them but never take the trash with them. Most of the green zones, parks, and other areas are too messy , and to improve
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 society should give a start with small steps: take their trash with them and put it into special boxes which later will be sent to recycling facilities.
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, by
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, the environment will be clearer and suitable for animals.
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, to be more realistic, organising special cleaning groups is more complicated these days because of
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 thinking that
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 is a waste of time or that it will bring some harm to them. Taking
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Africa as an example, they have one place near the lake where citizens throw all their waste , and
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they do not have any fresh air or clean places to wash their clothes.
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, probably those kinds of places are not worth being cleaned as they are already polluted , like how the majority of humans think, but everything is possible. In conclusion, by small steps like taking trash and putting it in special boxes will help to improve our environment.

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structure
Give a fuller view of both sides. Explain why some say it is too late and why some see hope.
grammar
Use simple, exact words. Fix grammar and use correct word form to make ideas clear.
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Add strong, closely related examples that fit the point. Plan before you write and keep a steady plan.
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The writer gives a clear personal view.
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There are ideas on how we can act to help nature.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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