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Some people believe that the increasing number of vehicles is one of the biggest problems facing cities, while others believe that cities have bigger challenge. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone
think
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thinks
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 that
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of private
vehicles
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 is
the
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a
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 large
problems
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problem
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 for the
cities
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,
while
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 numerous people believe that
cities
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 have many other
challanges
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challenges
 than
traffic
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. In my
opinon
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opinion
, council has many other
concern
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concerns
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 to think
rather
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about rather
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 than
traffic
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,
such
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 as poverty,
education
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 and waste management.
To begin
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 with, people believe that
traffic
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 and increasing numbers of
vehicles
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is
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are
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teh
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the
 larger issue.
Due to
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this
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,
vehicle
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growth
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 in the large
cities
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 is
the
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a
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 big problem without any doubt, but there are many other large problems to
lookafter
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look after
,
while
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 increasing of the
vehicles
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 creates
pollution
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 of air and sound
.
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pollution.
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Moreover
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, the
growth
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 of cars and bikes
depands
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depends
 on the
poppulation
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population
growth
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 and migration towards
cities
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,
it
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which
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 is improving
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 transportation,
casue
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causing
 more
pollution
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.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says
vehicle
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growth
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 is the problem for the authorities in large
cities
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, good public transport can avoid
this
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, and it
depands
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depends
 on the
poppulation
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population
.
On the other hand
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, the
govenment
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government
 has
the
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apply
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bigger
challanges
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challenges
 than
traffic
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 and improving
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of cars.
As a result
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, poverty, higher
education
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, waste and
pollution
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is
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are
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 the major things to work on for the ministry,
than
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rather than
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vehicle
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growth
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, good
education
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improve
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improves
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the
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apply
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traffic
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awearness
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awareness
 and
motivate
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motivates
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 people to use public transport.
Furthermore
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, the government has to focus on many things for
development
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the development
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 of the region
than
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, than
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vehicles
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,
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;
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education
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 can solve many problems.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned
improving
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that improving
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of
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apply
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 in
the
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apply
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large
cities
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 is not a concern if there
was
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is
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 good transportation
which
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, which
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 can save the climate from
the
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apply
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pollution
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 and save travel time which
avoids
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avoiding
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traffic
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, so
ministry
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the ministry
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 can focus on other issues. In conclusion,
traffic
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 and
increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 in the city
,
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apply
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is
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are
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 the major issue which creates
pollution
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 and consume more time for travel, which may
reduce
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reduced
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 with good
tansport
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transportation
,
while
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 in my view, the government has more
concen
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concern
which
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, which
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 can simply avoid
this
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 problem and many others.

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grammar
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structure
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coherence
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lexis
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content
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task response
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