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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The provided line graph illustrates the proportion of
income
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spend
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spent
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 on
fuel
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categorized
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categorised
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 by wealth level, in the United States and the United Kingdom.
According to
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 the data, there is a clear disparity
among
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between
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 the two countries, as the poorest in the US spend their salary more on
fuel
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 compared to the richest,
while
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 people in the UK show the opposite. As shown in the figure, Americans in the poorest category spend approximately 4% to 5.5% of their
income
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 on petrol.
Moreover
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, as their
income
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 increase, people in the middle group allocate their money less for
fuel
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 usage, and the richest spend the least, at around 3%.
Conversely
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, Britons who are poor only spend less than 3% of their
income
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 on petrol,
while
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 individuals in the
middle-class
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middle class
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 use up an average of 3% to 4%
from
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of
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 their money. Interestingly, those who are rich in the UK spend more money on
fuel
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 than
the
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apply
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US citizens, accounting for approximately 4%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Petrol expenditure
  • Expenditure trends
  • Spending comparison
  • Fluctuations in expenditure
  • Car dependency
  • Public transportation
  • Seasonal variations
  • Global oil prices
  • Government policies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Fuel tax
  • Spending habits
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