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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about noise from your house flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, • Explain the reasons for the noise Apologise Describe what action you will take

Dear Mr and Mrs Sidhu, I am writing to apologise for the disturbance I’ve been creating
since
Change preposition
over
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Linking Words
last
Correct article usage
the last
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 few days. Well, I
got
Verb problem
was
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 shocked to get your letter saying that
this
Linking Words
 noise has been spoiling your evening and causing
your
Correct pronoun usage
you
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 disturbance when you take rest.
Aa
Use the right word
As
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 you may have guessed, I am trying to fit wooden cupboards in
kitchen
Correct article usage
the kitchen
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along with
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 hanging new photo frames on the walls of my home when I get home from work. Unfortunately, it is all getting longer than expected
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 I have been facing problems with getting things done properly
,
Punctuation problem
;
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meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 there is a lot of hammering. As the kitchen is still not finished, I have decided to call a professional builder who will finish my work shortly. He will work only during daytime hours, so you won’t be disturbed in the evenings, I promise. Sorry for the
inconveniences
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inconvenience
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 I
made
Verb problem
caused
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. Yours faithfully, kaur

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Task response
There is a clear apology and a plan, but several parts could be stronger. Add a short line about how the noise will be kept to a minimum and give a specific daytime time for work.
Coherence and cohesion
Break your writing into 2 to 3 small parts. Start with an apology, then give the reason, then describe the action. Use simple link words like 'First', 'Next', 'Finally'.
Formality and tone
Use a formal sign-off and the correct form of greeting. If you use 'Dear Mr and Mrs Sidhu,' then end with 'Yours sincerely,'. Also fix name casing in your signature.
Grammar and accuracy
Fix small grammar and spelling mistakes. Examples: 'Aa you may have guessed' -> 'As you may have guessed'; 'disturbance I’ve been creating' -> 'the noise I have caused'; 'kaur' -> 'Kaur'.
task response
The letter asks for forgiveness and shows you regret the noise.
coherence
You explain why the noise happened and what you will do to stop it.
tone
The tone is polite and respectful overall.
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