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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

– A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give contact details for when you are away, give instructions about how to care for your pet, describe other household duties you would like your friend to undertake. When giving contact details, you do NOT need to write any addresses; something like the name of a friend you are staying with or a holiday destination is fine.

Dear Hind, Thank you for agreeing to house-sit. If you need to contact me,
i
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I
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 will leave my phone on, you can call me whenever you want.
Also
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,
i
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I
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 will be staying at
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the Rs
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Rs hotel
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Résidence Hotel
 in Paris. If it's urgent,
however
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, please ring my mobile phone. I have
writtien
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written
 the number on my notebook that
i
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I
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 put on the top of the table in my room. My cat needs to eat twice a day
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, at
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at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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 and evening. I left his food in the kitchen
,
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 you can find it
at
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in
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 the second drawer in the corner.
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, he likes to drink a cold milk before sleeping. I would like you to water my plants, too. Inside the
house
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house,
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 there
is
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are
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 a small plants, they need water once a day, but the plants
on
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in
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 the garden
needs
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need
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 to be watered daily. Do not forget to
close
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turn off
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 the lights
on
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in
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 the morning.
Last
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 but not least, check my box mail
everyday
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every day
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. I look forward to seeing you on my return. Yours faithfully, Maryam

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structure
Some lines read hard because ideas come in one long part. Use short lines and clear order: first tell how to reach you, then what to do with the pet, then the house tasks.
grammar
Fix grammar. Use I as a capital letter and end each sentence with a full stop.
content
You explain how to contact you and where you stay.
content
You give clear pet care and plant care steps.
tone
The letter keeps a polite, respectful tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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