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There are more cars on the roads these days and more accidents. As a result, some politicians have suggested that people should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single test.What do you think are the advantages of repeat driving tests? Do these outweigh the disadvantages?

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modern
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mind when we speak about transportation.
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 the roads.
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 accidents are
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increasing
. Some officials have a suggestion before
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 that people
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take the driving test more than
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 throughout their lives. In my opinion, the pros far outweigh the cons.
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proceduer
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drivers
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valid to drive and
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develop
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 helps to decrease the number of accidents.
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 one hand, the benefits of
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 rule are tangible.
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 assessment requires some
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conditions
 that must be in the driver. These requirements are changeable throughout
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 of years.
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condition
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 of the jockey alters throughout the time, as optic
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performence
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performance
, reaction ability and chronic
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diseases
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, in 2022 study by
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 of Baghdad presents that the major development in
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 quality
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center
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 funds.
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on
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 the other hand, there are a few issues
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believe
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 their perspective, the officials should focus more on different sectors to collect funds for
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 projects.
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, other
poilitcs
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policies
 apply a yearly tax on taxi
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,
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alos
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to retake the test.
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conclution
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conclusion
, the advantages have the
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largest
 effect on
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 the high
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accident
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 ratio. I believe there are some surmountable issues
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 which can
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it
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,
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by
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 more research to make
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grammar
Fix main grammar and spell words clearly. Use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
structure
Make your main ideas clear. Link the points. Use simple links like also, but, and.
content
Give strong and clear examples. For instance, say how tests can stop bad drivers or save money for roads.
vocabulary
Use easy words. Choose common words from daily use.
content
The essay gives the idea of tests over time and it tries to show pros and cons.
content
There is an effort to link the idea with real life issues in roads and health.
structure
The plan to end with a conclusion shows a structure go fit the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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