The pie charts below show the percentage of students at one adulteducation center taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.

The pie charts below show the percentage of students at one adulteducation center taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the percentage of students at one adulteducation center taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of students enrolled in different courses at an adult education
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in 1985 and
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year.
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, IT has now become a main course,
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Music appreciation and Local history
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have
been replaced. The number of students in other
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has changed as well. In 1985, Modern languages had the highest percentage, accounting for 24%, followed by Fitness and dance at 22%. Art, Local history and Cookery were
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equal, at 17%, 15% and 14% respectively. Music appreciation had the smallest share at 8%, representing
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of the largest group. From 1985 to
this
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year, both IT and Cookery have shown growth trends. IT has experienced
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significant growth, rising from zero to 27%
this
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year.
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, Music appreciation and Local history have been abolished. During the same period,
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Fitness and dance maintained
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share, the other two courses showed a downward trend. Modern languages declined by 7%, exceeding the 2% decrease in Art.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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