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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are done alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I do agree with the first statement, but that
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 me fully agree on the second statement. why? because
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 do think when more than
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 people gather and
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 something together
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 their knowledge
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 communication, social,
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 skills increases without any of their concern. When more than
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people
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 or we can say
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team work
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 together, they face something
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 as
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miscommunication
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of
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 individual behaviour,
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where
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 could lead
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 suspicion, doubts, lack of trust
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 the circle of
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teams
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.
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, from every
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said
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 above, they learn how to solve
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 step by step. And
that is
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 the benefit of
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activities
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, where
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 do think
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 which are done alone might
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be learnt
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it
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the hard way. But on what reason
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 disagree
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 individual
activites couldnt
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activities couldn't
 teach more
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 for life than
teams
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? 1. Individual
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requires
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require
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 independent,
dicipline
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discipline
, and responsibility life skills that
teams
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 might
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 do
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by themself. 2. As
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i
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 said above,
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activities
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 can
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 a lot of
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Teams
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 already get used
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 doing it all together,
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one
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 do
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this
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. But what if suddenly they need to do it all by their own?
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 every human could do their task alone. Not everyone could share which to do first and what
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 first alone. 4. I think Individual
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 can focus deeply on practices rather than
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team works
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 my opinion on Individual
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. But
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 must say, not everyone is the same. For some people, they would think
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team works
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 might suit them the best, but some others might think their path is to work alone.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view on this topic and make a small plan. Then write three clear ideas in separate sections, and finish with a short ending.
linking
Make each idea in its own paragraph. Start with a short line that states the point. Use simple words to show links like also or but.
accuracy
Check your spellings and grammar. Use short, simple sentences. Watch for wrong spell and its.
content
Give a real example from life to show your point, even small ones help to make your view strong.
task response
Keep a clear view. If you say you agree with one side, say why, then say a little about the other side.
idea
You show you think about both sides of the topic.
content
You make many points on why team work can be good and not.
structure
Your effort to tell your idea is clear.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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