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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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radio
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 and
television
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peoples
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people
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 throughout the day in 1992.
Overall
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,
television
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 shows
sunstantial
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substantial
 changes
upto
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up to
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 50% and
significant
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a significant
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 decline in
radio
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which
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, which
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 was reached at the
equal
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same
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time
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in
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apply
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between 2am to 4am. After analysing the line graph , it can be seen , from the
time
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 of 6am to 2pm
radio
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flucted
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fluctuated
 and
converge
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converged
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 with
television
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time
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 around 1pm.
On the other hand
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,
television
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 percentage
exceed
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exceeds
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 in the given
time
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.
Whereas
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, both
the
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apply
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ratio
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ratios
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 diverge after 2pm.
Therefore
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,
radio
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auidences
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audiences
 go down from 25% to 2% till 4am and
then
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 minimally went
upto
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up to
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 3% at 6am.
However
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 ,
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television
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television's
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individuals
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individual
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 percentile reached its highest peak at 9pm and
platued
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plateaued
 at 3pm shows conversion between
radio
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 and
television
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 percentage 2% , respectively. After that,
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a slighlty
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slighlty
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slight
declined
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decline
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 was seen in
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television
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the television
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 rate
comaprison
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compared
 with
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radio
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the radio
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, television, time, pm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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