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Some people believe that education and healthcare should be free of charge and funded by the government. Others think that it should be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Education
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 and Healthcare are basic necessities of life. Many folks reckon that these two utilities must be available without any charges and should be fully sponsored by the government; meanwhile,
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, some people do not agree with the above notion and think that these should be self-paid
services
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. I partially agree with the above statement and will put my efforts in the upcoming paragraph in order to explain my opinion. Health system and primary
education
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 are meant to be provided by local authorities, as people used to pay a lot of taxes to the government, and
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, are eligible to get these primary
services
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.
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, in all developed countries, these
services
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 are free of cost and available to all, so that the youth of the country can aid in a rising economy.
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, opponents significantly refuse the above criteria as they believe that it should be the personal responsibility of every individual in order to sustain their growth by getting proper
education
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 and facilities.
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, in a research study, it was found that in America, denizens used to get self-paid health and
education
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services
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 but do not pay any tax.
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 comparing both sides, in my opinion, people should take responsibility for their own expenses, but the privilege of free
education
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 and healthcare can
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 not be neglected.

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task response
Be clear about your view from the start and keep it in mind all through the essay. A simple plan helps: intro, two body paragraphs, short conclusion.
coherence
Make links between ideas easier. Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use small linking words like first, also, but, however, so, in conclusion.
content
You discuss both sides and give your own view.
content
You mention a place where education is free, which shows some broad ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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