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The table below shows social and economic indicators for three countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for three countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table illustrates several social and economic
indicators
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 based on United Nations statistics in four distinct countries in 1994.
According to
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 the data, there was a clear disparity across all nations, as Canada and Japan had a higher rate of all
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, making them developed countries, compared to Peru and Zaire. As shown in the figure, in 1994, individuals in Canada and Japan had an annual income of more than 10.000 USD.
Moreover
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, their life expectancy at birth
were
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was
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also
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 high, at 76 and 78, respectively. Moving to the next
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, Canadians consumed a
higher calorie
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higher-calorie
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 food daily compared to
Japanese
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the Japanese
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, with a difference of around 500.
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, nearly all of their citizens were able to read and write.
Conversely
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, Peru and Zaire significantly had lower
figure
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figures
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 in all
indicators
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. Their annual income per person
were
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was
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 only fewer than 200 USD and
younger
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a younger
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 life expectancy, at less than
55-year
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55 years
.
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, the food supply in both nations usually had lower
calorie
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calories
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, at under 2000. Notably, a low literacy rate was observed in Peru and Zaire, at 68% and 34%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indicators with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • country
  • year
  • table
  • indicator
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • health
  • income
  • population
  • urban
  • rural
  • high
  • low
  • the highest
  • the lowest
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • increase
  • decrease
  • rise
  • fall
  • grow
  • stay the same
  • overall
  • in addition
  • but
  • however
  • whereas
  • while
  • than
  • as
  • percent
  • figure
  • data
  • compare
  • contrast
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