You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying , so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. write a letter to this friend. -give details of your study plans -explain why you want to get a part time job -suggest how your friend could help you to find a job

Dear Angela, How are you doing? I hope you are fit as a fiddle.I am writing to you

this

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letter to tell you about my

masters

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master's

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degree program admission I got recently and ask for help to get a part-time job

while

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I am schooling.

Firstly

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have

got an admission

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been admitted

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Wakefield

university

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University

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to study

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a bachelors

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bachelors

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Bachelor's

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degree in Nursing

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apply

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this

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coming winter.

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is going to start around 9th November,2025.It is only a

2 year

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2-year

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program which will enlighten my knowledge in

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apply

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laboratory skills.I am planning to

further

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my education

after

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this

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program and get a PHD.

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will

also

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hep

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help

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me become a laboratory manager.

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,since I did not get

full

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a full

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scholarship for

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advancement

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advancement,

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I would like to get a part-time job.I

initially

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thought the school would fully

find

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fund

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my course

but

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, but

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unfortunately

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it was partially funded.I

therefore

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need a side job to support me with my bills and food. I believe that you have worked

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for so

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many years with Amazon and have more experience working with them.

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Therefore

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it will be easy for you to recommend me to your boss.

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,you can

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help me find any care home which is

about

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apply

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at most 100meters away from

wakefield university

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Wakefield University

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. I hope to hear from you soon.My warmest regards to your siblings

especially

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, especially

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your elder sister. Your Friend Esther

estherduah39

Sep 8, 2025

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structure

Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with the plan, then say why you need the job and how your friend can help in separate parts.

language

Check spell and grammar. Use simple words and put spaces after periods. Use PhD not PHD and 'care home' is okay.

content

Be clear on how your friend can help. Ask for a real step, like meet the boss or pass your CV, and say where and when.

tone

Keep a kind tone and a neat form. Be polite but direct.

tone

Friendly tone and warm intro.

content

Clear plan about study path and time.

relevance

Ask for help to find a job with a near place.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

219 words

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