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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables where they cannot be grown or out of season. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

In today`s fast-paced world,
air
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 cargo is rapidly used to export fresh produce
where
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apply
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they
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that
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 cannot be grown or
it
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apply
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can only grow in a season. In my opinion, the advantages of
this
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 method outweigh the disadvantages
, it
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. It
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 can be
sell
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sold
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 at
good
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a good
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 price where it cannot grow,
while
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 some
region
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regions
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 have more than enough production of some
vagetables
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vegetables
, which is
exessive
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excessive
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 for
local
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the local
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 population.
To begin
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 with,
transfer
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the transfer
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 of
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this
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these
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 products can create income for local producers
and
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, and
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 where it is
imported
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imported,
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 they may enjoy
out
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our
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 seasoned goods.
Due to
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this
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, the government may get higher export taxes.
Moreover
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, whoever
importing
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imports
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 fruit and
vagetables
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vegetables
 from
onother
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another
 nation, they can eat great
quality
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of
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apply
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fruits
of
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from
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 another country regardless season of some fruits, as every region has various availability of produce, according
local
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to local
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 weather and soil.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says exporting
good
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goods
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 may
benefit
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be beneficial
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 for local farmers with higher
profit
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profits
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, and the ministry may earn more
duty
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in duties
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.
On the other hand
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, there are some
nagetive
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negative
 impacts of
transportation
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the transportation
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 of
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this
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these
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 goods.
As a result
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,
air
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 transport may increase
polution
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pollution
 of
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air
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the air
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, with the emission of carbon and damage the climate.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 kind of produce
mostly
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is mostly
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 stored in
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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,
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;
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 cultivation time and
consume
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consumption
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 time have
huge
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a huge
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 difference of mostly three to five days of transportation,
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this
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which
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effects
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affects
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 the
quality
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 of food
,
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 and may cause health problems. Local farmers
also
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 face
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a nagetive
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nagetive
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negative
 impact, as they may get
lower
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a lower
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 rate
of
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for
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 local produce.
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, there was
a
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apply
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an article in the Times of India which mentioned
stored
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that stored
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 fruits and goods
has
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have
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 poor
quality
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 and may cause serious health issues, and
air
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 transport
create
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creates
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 more pollution. In conclusion,
transported
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transporting
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vagetables
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vegetables
 and fruit has poor
quality
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 can increase health problems
and
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, and
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air
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 traffic
also
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impact
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impacts
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air
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quality
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, in
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. In
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 my view,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
this
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 trend outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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with
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, with
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 great
availibility
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availability
 regardless of season and higher income for farmers and the authority.

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