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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010.

The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010.
This
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 graph illustrates the percentages of four
of
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types of
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 waste
which
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, which
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 are plastic, cans, paper, and glass, which were recycled in a city in 1992, 1997 and 2002.
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, we can clearly
notic
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notice
 that the
coustome
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cost
in
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of
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 all these
stuff
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things
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 has been increasing
in
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over
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all
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apply
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the years. In the years
,
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apply
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 1997 and
2002
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2002,
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 the
useing
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use
 of plastic was the same
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, which
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 is about 11.
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, in 1992
was
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were
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 not a lot, it was just 10. Cans were 9 ,14 , and 20 in 1992, 1997, and 2002
persactevly
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respectively
.
Paper
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Papers
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 were 40 in 2002,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in 1992
was
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were
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 15. In 1997 was about 21. Glass
were
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was
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 50 in 2002
which
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, which
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 is the most
one
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apply
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. About 18 in 1997, and 15 in 1992.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling rates
  • types of waste
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic and glass
  • noticable increases
  • stable
  • landfill sites
  • decrease
  • percentage
  • 10-year period
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