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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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students’
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 achievement is significantly important in the educational system.
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 some people think that formal examinations
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 more beneficial than continual
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. I firmly believe that
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 are effective in different ways to make sure that pupils are doing well in their studies. In
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 has several advantages
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 learners’ performance.
First,
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it tests wider skills.
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, through
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a project
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 teacher can assess
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 in different points
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 as solving problems, teamwork and creativity.
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coursework and
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projects
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 encourage individuals to learn and improve their performance,
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 more enjoyable and practical.
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, continual
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students
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 better way to gain knowledge with more passion.
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, formal examinations
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 fair and
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. In
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, exams are
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 for all
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, which
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makes it
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 easy for tutors to compare their levels.
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, in some
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teachers
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, teachers
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 need to assess pupils by formal examinations.
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, in mathematics, it is important for teacher to see their understanding and abilities.
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, reduce unfair help. In conclusion, make sure
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 understand
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that the
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 lesson is more important for
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the teacher
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 to enhance their achievement through different
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, as exams and continual
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. I believe that both ways are effective to give a clear picture
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students’
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 performance.

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task
Give a clear view in the first line. Then add 2 or 3 strong points with small examples. Check small grammar and end with a clear summary.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use easy linking words like First, Also, Then, But. Make the idea flow smooth from one line to the next.
content
The essay shows some good attempt to sound fair by saying both sides.
structure
There is a start and end to the essay; it is easy to see the plan.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized assessment
  • criteria
  • benchmark
  • performance comparison
  • evaluation under pressure
  • simulate
  • real-world scenarios
  • time management
  • comprehensive coverage
  • subject grasp
  • objectivity
  • lifelong learning
  • engagement
  • practical application
  • skill development
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • individualized feedback
  • student well-being
  • exam stress
  • academic environment
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