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The table below show that the amount of three types of fish farmed in one region between 2008 and 2018

The table below show that the amount of three types of fish farmed in one region between 2008 and 2018
The table illustrates the volume of three types of fish production in one area from 2008 to 2018.
Overall
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, Arctic char was higher than
Salmon
Use synonyms
 and Rainbow trout during the first times
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whereas
Punctuation problem
, whereas
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, highest growth was
Salmon
Use synonyms
at the end
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.
On the other hand
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,
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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 action was observed in Rainbow trout. The first indicators were 3124 and 292
at
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for
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 Arctic char and
Salmon
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 in 2008, respectively. The most significant change was considered from 2016 to 2018
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, which
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which
Correct word choice
when
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 Arctic char started to increase from 4084 and reached
to
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apply
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4914.
Furthermore
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,
Salmon
Use synonyms
 was 8420 in 2016
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 showed
Correct article usage
a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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 increase and
rosed
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rose
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 to 13448.
By contrast
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, Rainbow trout experienced a gradual climb
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was only 6
millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
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of
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apply
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tones
Use the right word
tons
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 in 2008. There was
slight
Correct article usage
a slight
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grow
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growth
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 from 2008 to 2016
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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rosed
Use the right word
rose
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 to 2138.
However
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, it experienced a
sharply declined
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sharp decline
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 between 2016 and 2018 which
declined
Wrong verb form
declining
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 to 295.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aquaculture
  • sustainable
  • Mariculture
  • inland fisheries
  • artisanal fishing
  • commercial production
  • fish stocks
  • aquatic feed
  • harvest
  • yield
  • freshwater
  • marine
  • brackish
  • cultivated
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • overfishing
  • conservation
  • ecology
  • aquafarming
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